雅思作文怎么练到5.5

雅思作文怎么练到5.5

写作可能是雅思考试中较难的一项，这个难主要是针对想要拿高分的同学，因为它不像雅思听力或者阅读那样，突破一两个月就可以有比较明显的突飞猛进，相反，写作是一个需要长期积累的过程。5的资料，欢迎查阅。

我们以这个雅思题目为例：

Some groups of people benefit tremendously from modern communication technology，but some others think it is not beneficial to them at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

有一些人认为，从现代通讯技术可以获得巨大的好处,但也有一些人认为这并不有利于他们。你是同意还是反对呢?

就这个题目，我们先来分析一位学生的5.5分雅思作文：

第1段： With the widespread use of the Internet and technological progression, it is more easier to contact each other. Some people profit from modern communication technology,especially who are far apart from each other ,while others do not. From where I stand, there are some people can not enjoy the benefit from convenient communication in the information age.

点评：作为开头段，本段思路是不错的，但是需要做如下修改：【1】progression - progress; 【2】 More easier - much easier; 【3】 especially who are far... - especially those who are far...; 【4】 there are some people cannot enjoy - some people cannot enjoy / there are some people who cannot enjoy; 【5】 根据后文，增加了because of poverty and their age，开头段直接点出后面要论述的主题，增加文章的连贯性。

第2段：To start with, people in remote area or impoverished countries where they still stay in touch with each other by letter or telegram could not enjoy the convenience from advanced communication techniques. They are not well-informed about the progress of those modern technologies owing to the limited news resources. In addition, many remote regions still do not have access to mobile phone coverage and the Internet. Because the local governments may not afford the fee in terms of the high cost of building some communication base station and burying optical fiber.

点评：本段写得不错，如果这篇雅思作文的全文都能写到这个水平，6.5-7分都有可能，但存在问题：【1】 may not afford不是一个常见的搭配，应该是cannot afford; 【2】 通讯站，光纤之类可用communication infrastructure来统称，其中infrastructure的意思是“基础设施”。

第3段：We can not deny the fact that that modern means of communication have became an indispensable part in people’s lives due to their merits. Email, smart phone, instant messaging programme 【like Wechat,Line】 and social networking websites 【Twitter,Facebook】 have greatly improved the efficiency and effectiveness of long-distance for many people. With signal covering, they enable people to contact with friends and family members wherever and whenever possible .Moreover, modern communication technology has lowered the costs of communicating. However, some people ,especially the elder, do not profit from the development of communication technology. It is of great difficulties for them to learn how to use email or instant messaging APP. Accordingly , the elder still utilize relatively original means of communication, like telephone and mails.

本段问题最大，尤其是思路。本段论证“老年人无法享受现代通讯科技”，但本段前面一大段都在讲现代科技的优势所在，这是离题的。应该一开始就像第二段那样提出主题句，然后展开论证，即为什么老年人无法享受通讯科技。修改文提出了两个原因，一是他们习惯了传统方法，二是他们学不会现代设备，然后举爷爷为例，他不认识罗马字母，因此无法使用现代通讯科技。这样论证很清楚，很清晰。

第4段： To conclude, I would concede that modern communication technology enable tons of people to enjoy the convenience. Despite that, some people , including people in remote areas and the elder, are not beneficial from these. Over all, I am convinced that government should provide funds for remote region to develop accesses to the Internet and mobile phone coverage. Also the media is supposed to popularize the advanced communication technology for the elder.

点评：结尾段思路不错，仅有几个用词小错误。

经修改后的雅思作文：

With the widespread use of the Internet and technological progress, it is much easier to contact each other. Some people profit from modern communication technology, especially those who are far apart from each other, while others do not. From where I stand, I do find some people can not enjoy the benefit from convenient communication in the information age because of poverty or their age.

To start with, people in remote area or impoverished countries where they still stay in touch with each other by letter or telegram could not enjoy the convenience from advanced communication techniques. They are not well-informed about the progress of those modern technologies owing to the limited news resources. In addition, many remote regions still do not have access to the Internet connection, because the local governments cannot afford the high cost of building the Internet and communication infrastructure such as the optical fiber.

Furthermore, the elderly people also find that they can hardly benefit from the modern communication technology. They have been so used to the traditional ways of communication that some of them can never adjust themselves to the new methods. There are also some old people who find that they simply cannot learn how to use email or instant messaging APPs, though to the young, these are really simple applications. My grandpa is an example. His inability to recognize Roman letters makes it impossible for him to use any of these convenient means of communication.

To conclude, modern communication technology enables many people to enjoy its conveniences. Despite that, some people , including people in remote areas and the elder, are not benefited from these. Over all, I am convinced that government should provide funds for remote region to develop accesses to the Internet connection. Also the media is supposed to popularize the advanced communication technology to the elderly. 【307 words】

使用雅思作文模板的注意事项

一、语言能力很低，文法基本上是不通的，词汇量同样是很有限，写作目标分数在5分。此类学生最想的是通过背诵几篇范文便可以在考试时混个5分。但是大部分时候，却都是事与愿违，有一些学生日夜苦背，已经积累了十多篇文章，最后依然是连5分都未到。 这类学生最大的问题有两个：不能独立地写出一句完整正确的单句并且考试看不懂题目。

二、有可以用在简单沟通的词汇量，还可以去撰写常见句式，单句撰写熟练。写作目标分数在6分。此类学生成为了现在人数最多的，通常在突六和精六班级。这一类学生有很大的学习潜力，在审题还没有大的差错时，通常得分5分到5.5 之间。此类学生在自己阅读范文时，都爱去喜欢积累难词和复杂句式，而有一些学生在考试时太过的倾向在用生僻词汇，长句能够写4到5行，甚至一段一句。这些学生普遍存在的问题是论证能力差，扣题不紧，对句子功能的把握不强。 建议：在老师的指导下，批判式的学习范文，在积累词汇和句式的基础上，重点把握句子的功能以及主体段论证的展开。关注审题的精确性和相关主题的论证材料积累。句式长短句合理使用，不宜写过长句子，绝不能出现一段一句的情况。

三、有很扎实的语言功底的考生，写作目标分数在7分或以上成绩。 可以去选择不同种类题型的范文简单阅读就行了。根本是完全没必要再去研读范文，要不然只会误导自己。

雅思写作时怎么避免考试的常见错误

很多同学最爱用的高频句式，也是从小接触英语最开始的句型there be，可以说是人见人爱，在各种话题，大小作文中都通用的结构，可是，它也是很多同学经常不注意就出错的陷阱地方。

比如说，我们想表达“有好几个原因导致了这个结果。”如果按照字面的意思直接翻译，很容易写成“There are several reasons lead to the result.”这样的句子。

这样一来，我们会发现，这个句子中出现了双谓语： are和 lead这种错误，我们可以通过提醒自己，在写there be句型时，be动词部分保持主谓一致，但其他的行为的描述我们去写非谓语或者从句。

也就是说，刚才错误的句子我们可以改成There are several reasons leading to the result. 或者There are several reasons which lead to the result.大家可以立刻尝试下，结合非谓语或者从句翻译下面的句子：“有一些公司允许员工在家工作。”

除了双谓语的这样的高频错误外，很多同学在处理中文想说的比较长难的句子时候，也会因为直接翻译，而反映出中式英语或者很多语法错误，我们来看一个例子。“在生活中出现的问题可以解决，对未来有可能出现的麻烦进行规避。”你会怎么写这句话呢?

曾经有同学写出过 “Life problems can solve, future trouble can prevent.”这样的翻译版本。各位同学如果仔细挑一挑错误，会发现，一个句子中出现了双主语，双谓语。那么，解决办法最简单的是把逗号变句号，写成两句话。或者进行相关的连接词的衔接，比如此句中可以加and来连接两个简单句。

除了这个错误外，我们还会发现，问题自己怎么解决啊?麻烦自己怎么预防啊?所以，这种中文说起来像主动，但是在英语表达中我们实际上需要被动的翻译，是大家要去多注意和检查的陷阱地方。如果对应中文直接翻译，就出现了多动词，语态不合理的问题了。

所以这个句子应该改成Problems in life can be solved and trouble in future may be prevented.