资深老师实例讲解托福作文模板使用方法

资深老师实例讲解托福作文模板使用方法

实例讲解如何使用托福作文模板：不知何时，“模板”这个词已经悄悄兴起，并且渐渐占据了托福写作备考的半边天。那么，“托福写作模板”有没有使用的价值呢？当然，如果你能够恰当的使用托福写作模板写作文，不仅能够节省时间，也能迅速捋清思路，构架自己的托福作文结构。不过，千篇一律的托福写作模板的使用，也会是托福阅卷老师产生审美疲劳，即使没有语法错误，使用托福写作模板做出来的作文一般也不会得到高分。所以，我们要聪明的、原创性的使用托福写作模板，下面，大家就通过这两个例子来学习如何使用托福写作模板吧！先来看两段例子!第一段是不好的例子，第二段是好的例子。Nowadays, thanks to the development of Internet, we are exposed to a vast ocean of information. Some argue that so much information brings a great benefit to our life and study. But for me, the experience with surfing Internet leads me to believe that accessing much information cause more problems than it solves.——————————————————————————————Perhaps no issue in this world is as significance to students as education. Despite various responses people may have on the topic concerning the issue regarding which thing should the education aim at. I, given the chance, prefer to endorse that preparing for careers should have primary consideration.作为阅文无数的老师，当看到第一篇文章的时候，我已经没有了当初得的兴奋，因为这样的文章实在是太常见了!首先Nowadays这个单词是被无数老师推崇的“高级”单词-_-!!!我一直无法理解，为什么有的单词会更高级。然后thanks to节宾语，天呐!多么明显的模板!当我往下看的时候，我只能无意识的检查是否有语法错误，没有语法错误的话，我也就只能给个一般的分数就好了。但是当老师看到第二篇文章的时候，初看觉得此文写得不错。用词准确地道，而且完全是自己完成没有模板，但是当我回头再一回味这篇文章的时候，惊讶的发现，这篇文章竟然也是由模板所出!首先Perhaps no issue in this world is as significance to students as education。看似平淡无奇，但是实际上Perhaps no issue in this world is as significance to就是一个模板，更厉害的是下一句!Despite various responses people may have on the topic concerning the issue regarding which thing should the education aim at.这么长的一句话，竟然只有后3个单词不是模板!然后再接下来，下一句的“given the chance, ”其实对于整句话来说根本就没有任何实际上语义的改变!但适当加进来之后，我们会感觉到非常的地道!之所以无老师感觉如此震惊，原因非常简单，就是因为在这篇文章身上完全看不出半点模板的影子，为什么看不出模板的影子呢?就是因为这篇文章的模板是完全原创的，哪怕不是原创的，也是仅在小范围内流传的!而且这篇文章后面类似的妙手不计其数!反过来再看国内流传甚广的403模板，虽然也是胜在模板分量够重，但是由于使用的人实在是太多，实际上已经变成了一颗毒丸。除了让考官恶心致死，爬起来之后给我们一个低分之外，别无其他的效果。当然这里很多人很想看看403模板的阵容，这简单，预知后事如何，且听下回分解!请关注无老师接下来推出的

首先来看一下上文里面所提到的403模板。In a modern society, people always face the dilemma to choose whether AAA or BBB. This problem is the much debated one in that it affects everybody in their daily lives. People may prefer one to another although some may have no opinions about it at all. Before rendering my opinion, I think it is necessary to take a glance at the arguments of both sides.It is quite easy for average people to choose BBB because of the obvious reason that—. It can be given by a well known example thatBut at the mean time, although BBB has some advantages, it also has many drawbacks such as —. Therefore we have no complete evidence to suggest that BBB is always better than AAA. What is more, the innate quality of AAA, unfortunately, is often underestimated; in other words,if you notice the invisible benefits of choosing AAA, you can understand AAA more deeplyHere I would explain a few of the most important reasons. The main reason is that —. To illustrate this, there is an appropriate example that is very persuasive: -— is only part of the important aspects, and another equally significant role of choosing AAA lies in the development of —.This demonstrates the undeniable fact that —.Besides, the further reason why I advocate AAA is that —. This may explain why —.In addition, some experts maintain that —-. This significant point, however, is often not noticed by most people and accordingly, is unconsciously overlookedFinally, as a proverb says, “Everything has two sides”. Although I admit that there are a couple of advantages of —-, I still think that the disadvantages of it are more obvious. Such as —, —-, and —-. This demonstrates that we have no complete evidence to suggest that BBB is always better than AAAIf all the factors above are considered, we will find out that the advantages of AAA outweigh those of BBB. Therefore from what we have discussed, we may safely come to the conclusion that choosing AAA is a rather wise decision. But I have not denied the opinion that choosing BBB. I must admit that people can do well without AAA, but no one can ignore the added convenience and satisfaction offered by AAA. Such experience will definitely be helpful in one’s later life。像这种开头以In a modern society, people always face the dilemma to choose whether AAA or BBB.来作为开始的模板，实在是太多太普遍了。当然还包括“Nowadays, some people hold the opinion that”“In modern society,”当一看到这样的标题，考官就好像用自己的左手握着自己的右手，丝毫感觉不到有任何的激情产生。但是同样是模板，其实如果我们另辟蹊径，换用一种完全不同的手法来写，感觉就是十分的清新。Before rendering my stand, I think it is essential to take a glance at the argument on both sides. 就是这样，虽然同样也是在展示自己的观点，但是由于完全不同于以前我们看到的十分程式化的模板。其实模板很多时候看的不是用多少词，以及句型有多么的夸张，其实很多时候凭借前一个词与我们以前看到的文章的匹配程度，就已经有很强的感觉了。当然我们在塑造模板的时候，也是要遵循一定的原则的：1. 确定文章主体框架结构，包括引出观点和总结观点的词汇，句式，这个可能是网大多数模板的水平;2. 确定论证过程的框架，每个支持段落都有各自的论证模式，举例，因果，对比等，确定到论证的逻辑引导词上;3. 通过改写句子，采用合适的词汇代替以上两步的成果;4. 改变句式，将各类语法结够加入其中：倒装，独立主格结构，虚拟语气等。这个思路是十分完备的，按照这个思路再加上充足的练习，几乎可以预见到这篇作文的分数将是无限接近满分的。

那么我们就照这个思路来走。首先第一步确定主体结构，其实现在的托福作文总体来说大多采取3-5段式。第1段点题，第2-4段展开，后一段，也就是第5段收尾。这是整体的文章结构，具体到每一段之内，也是遵循这个思路，第1、2句表明本段的主题，然后接下来几句话进行支持，如果是第一段、那么在该段落的后还要给第二段留出引子，以及在后一段后1、2句还要进行总结，以及强调自己的观点。至于第三步，改写句子对于大多数人来说，其实还是寻找句子，然后才是改写句子。搜集句子与改写句子其实是一个互相辅助的关系，你搜集的好句子多了，那么你改写的难度就低了;反过来，你搜集的好句子少，那么相应的要取得高分，你需要做的改写就多了。因此从这个角度来看，还是一开始就把搜集句子这个步骤做扎实来得好。要说搜集句子，首先要有一个坚强的后盾，那么这些后盾从哪里来呢?这要看你需要什么句子，如果是找每一段开篇点题的句子，比较好还是找一些文学性比较强的东西，比如说一些给白领看的经济类文章，我们经常提到了的[经济学人].The.Economist.就属此类。比如说无老师就从2008年11月15日这一期的第12页找到了一个很好的句子，很适合当文章的开头。Asked what China will do to rescue the world from financial turmoil, its officials these days have a boilerplate answer：its greatest contribution will be to keep its own economy running smoothly.我们把它放在Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.这个作文题目之下，就可以改写成Asked what teachers will do to improve their students, the response in high schools have a boilerplate answer：the greatest contribution of homework will be to keep its their students appreciating their knowledge entirely.

那么我们提炼一下Asked what …… will do to ……, the response in …… have a boilerplate answer：the greatest contribution of …… will be to keep its their …….就是一个十分出色的作文开头模板。我们也可以从同样是2008年11月15日这一期的120页找到Further evidence of emerging markets’ potential comes from the experience of Britain’s AstraZeneca in China.这一句只要稍加修改就可以变成一个非常出色的2-4段的段落开头，首先把他模板化Further evidence of …… comes from the experience of …… in …….然后再加入一点倒装句式来证明我们的文学水平Not only does ……come from the experience of …… in ……., but 【also】 evidence of ……subsequently【further】 prove……这样一个出色的论证段的段首句模板就完成了。至于例子的模板，那么就是新闻的天下了，我们仍然可以在《经济学人The.Economist》里面寻找，当然也可以到新华网的英文版里面寻找。无老师就找到了这么一句话South Korea’s capital city now has been named their most favored travel destination two years in row, according to the report, as 11.4 percent of the Chinese, 9.8 percent of the Japanese, and an overwhelming 20.0 percent of the Thai expressed their preference for Seoul, toppling cities like Tokyo, Paris and Honolulu in the survey. 这里面我们就可以把这个句子直接提炼为模板…… now has been named their most favored …… two years in row, according to the report, as 11.4 percent of the ……, 9.8 percent of the ……, and an overwhelming 20.0 percent of the …… expressed their preference for ……, toppling cities like …, … and … in the survey.相识的数字，加上确凿的低点，一切显得都是那么无可辩驳，但是实际上这就是一个模板。

当然我们不肯能每一个句子都是这么长，因此我们可以加入很多For example, Therefore, 所引导的句子来增强文章内部的节奏感，使得读者不会感觉到过于疲惫。至于末段的模板则是有一些讲究的，但是当老师看了无数篇作文和《经济学人The.Economist》的文章之后，无老师开始反思我们很多学生写的“ After ruminating over all these factors, ”“It is more advantageous for us to make decision alone,”“As far as I am concerned, I come to the notion that”这类作文结尾，是否是一种符合欧美人思维的文章，因为你只要稍微把经济学人的文章找几篇文章的结尾看一下就会知道，其实这里面绝大多数时候，都是以罗列多方观点作为末段的开头。然后以开放式的笔法来进行结尾。这与我们很多学生写的一面倒型的结尾是完全不同的。关于如何使用托福作文模板，本文就先讲到这里，托福模板的作用肯定有，用好了还很惊人，各位托福考友们，对托福模板的使用还需要更加创新一点。